Writing term three

WALT: use more details after a comma

Here is my recount.

In the holidays dad and me went motorbiking with his friend and his son. When we got to the motorbiking track we got our motorbikes my motor bike was a 100cc and dad was a 450cc. We then started riding. After about half an hour we had some food and water then me and Shilo had a race and he won. 

We then went on the track and raced around.

Then this girl came and showed us new ways to go around the track. My dad started motorbiking and we followed him around the river. We then went back onto the track.

I zoomed around the track and then did a big jump and crashed into the dirt. I had some crackers then raced off and did a huge slide. My dad caught up to me and we both motor biked off down the long rocky track,“Wait up dad”I said “OK” said dad. It was now 3.00 so we put our motor bikes on the trailer and went back home to help mum with Benji.