Olympic recount women's sevens

This is my recount about the women's rugby sevens tournament 

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On Saturday most of the people in the world sat at home and watched the women's sevens NZ VS SPAIN. In the first five minutes, NZ scored a try and got the conversion. Then Spain scored a try and missed the conversion.

In the next ten minutes,NZ started giving it their all and made five tries and got four conversions and missed the fifth conversion. New Zealand's winger was really fast because she could get past everyone.

At the end of the game a player from NZ jumped onto the other players and yelled “we won!” then walked over to Spanish team and said “you suckers” and got tackled by the guard.

 

Writing term three

WALT: use more details after a comma

Here is my recount.

In the holidays dad and me went motorbiking with his friend and his son. When we got to the motorbiking track we got our motorbikes my motor bike was a 100cc and dad was a 450cc. We then started riding. After about half an hour we had some food and water then me and Shilo had a race and he won. 

We then went on the track and raced around.

Then this girl came and showed us new ways to go around the track. My dad started motorbiking and we followed him around the river. We then went back onto the track.

I zoomed around the track and then did a big jump and crashed into the dirt. I had some crackers then raced off and did a huge slide. My dad caught up to me and we both motor biked off down the long rocky track,“Wait up dad”I said “OK” said dad. It was now 3.00 so we put our motor bikes on the trailer and went back home to help mum with Benji.