Term 2 Writing: recount

The crowd was getting bigger and I was getting more squished. Finally the doors opened. We all walked inside to the hall and sat down. I couldn't believe that I was inside Hastings intermediate. Then a man walked up up onto the stage and introduced himself to the crowd. Then a kapahaka group came out. They were Havlock North intermediate and they were awesome. Next it was our turn I go onto the stage. I was so nervous. Then the boys went in front and we sang the song potania. When we went off I was puffed.

I have been working on making my writing more descriptive. I want to improve my writing by putting in more adjectives.